Oh wow Daily Deviation! I just now proofread and fixed all the grammatical errors from when I was sick (I wasn't expecting the DD) and also changed the pdf formatting to a more enjoyable 6 inch by 6 inch layout.
Although this is a DD (Which is commendable in itself, and thus far greater a banner than this critique) I must emphasize that the only things which I didn't like in this work were:
the use of the word "fuck" when Art is cynically thinking. Use "damn" instead. I can understand that proof-reading is a terrible process and it takes a lot of effort to revisit old concepts, but still.
Apart from that (which played a huge impact on me as a reviewer) I feel you've written a powerful narration on the death of art as a humane emotion expressed.
No wonder it was chosen as a daily deviation. Congratulations!
I like this text, especially this part "Art walked through the narrow glass tube hall and knew that no instrument behind a glass case can show beauty. The beauty emerges from usage." It's obvious, but I had never really thought about it. Now I no longer feel guilty for have sold my guitar, which I've never been able to play.
A text to think about... a lot of things. I am really happy I have read it, and hope you'll still have lots of dds.
I loved the play on words. Art Ongaku...Art Music! Very nice. xD I enjoyed this piece a lot. It made me feel sad...it showed how the Government didn't care for the music. It makes me wonder what's going to happen to the typewriters...
Yeah I think it's the same. Well it can be used figuratively like that, which was why I picked the titles "The Piano Facade" so it's sort of a play on words because even though there is literally pianos on the exterior of the building, it is kind of a false propaganda.
EckoSlimeFeatured By OwnerNov 13, 2012Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It totally makes sense, and more now that I see the title xD You see, "Façade" is also a french word (You know, the C but with the little tail below it) but I also realized that Facade could be used in a couple of different ways of speech, that's why I was confused, but now I understand ^^ By the way! Congratulations on the DD"
Nope it's for everyone. Here's instructions: 1.) Click Submit Art 2.) Upload your content 3.) Look to your right, there's a premium content box, check it 4.) Continue to submit as you usually do 5.) You will be taken to a page where you upload additional art that can be sold for however many points you choose. (The for sale content has to offer something other than the art you posted. It can be other art relating to what you posted or edits of it.)
This is rather unique! Kinda sucks that this guy had no say in what the government did with his things though. Anyway, from one writer to another, I would like to say that you did a great job, and was wondering if I could get your opinion on a poem I posted last night.