Oh wow Daily Deviation! I just now proofread and fixed all the grammatical errors from when I was sick (I wasn't expecting the DD) and also changed the pdf formatting to a more enjoyable 6 inch by 6 inch layout.
Although this is a DD (Which is commendable in itself, and thus far greater a banner than this critique) I must emphasize that the only things which I didn't like in this work were:
the use of the word "fuck" when Art is cynically thinking. Use "damn" instead. I can understand that proof-reading is a terrible process and it takes a lot of effort to revisit old concepts, but still.
Apart from that (which played a huge impact on me as a reviewer) I feel you've written a powerful narration on the death of art as a humane emotion expressed.
No wonder it was chosen as a daily deviation. Congratulations!
I like this text, especially this part "Art walked through the narrow glass tube hall and knew that no instrument behind a glass case can show beauty. The beauty emerges from usage." It's obvious, but I had never really thought about it. Now I no longer feel guilty for have sold my guitar, which I've never been able to play.
A text to think about... a lot of things. I am really happy I have read it, and hope you'll still have lots of dds.
I loved the play on words. Art Ongaku...Art Music! Very nice. xD I enjoyed this piece a lot. It made me feel sad...it showed how the Government didn't care for the music. It makes me wonder what's going to happen to the typewriters...
Yeah I think it's the same. Well it can be used figuratively like that, which was why I picked the titles "The Piano Facade" so it's sort of a play on words because even though there is literally pianos on the exterior of the building, it is kind of a false propaganda.