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Our minds are glued to skin & bones
Attached to arbitrary forms
Souls borne through green and blue lives
Eyes colored, a chemistry like skies
At different times
Different lives
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:bulletblack: The chemistry of this planet has created minds which are glued onto our bodies like awareness on machines & those bodies reflect the nature of the universe in which they exist.

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:bulletblack: Thank you for reading!

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This was a stark contrast, but a worthwhile read.

The final line amalgamates what is provided by the remaining parts of this poem. Its an amazing work to read, and also a wonderful narration about humans in general.

Each line in itself has an explicit meaning, but this work as a whole is more than that - it has a significant amount of depth that can take one's breath away if one isn't too careful about it.

And after untitled this work actually made an impact on me - given that I gave this work a second read, its actually pretty good.
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I loved this. I loved the simplicity and how much impact it had on me. The last two lines.
At different times
Different lives

Really moved me for some reason and I have to say I enjoyed this a lot...more then a lot. I thin that when a writer can get such an impact from minimum words it is surely a skill that people should be envious of and as a writer myself I am. I love this a lot as I have said before and I think many more people should read this.

Each line holds a different significance and gets a reaction from myself and I sure do hope all your other readers. I also think that the title of this piece is simply perfect.

Over all it is a very simple poem but it is so deep that it sends shivers down my spine.
Well done.
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Missdelayingit Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this! It's so cool, and drew me in so quickly. I usually don't like rhyming, but this was amazing. Awesome job! :D
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threedayweekend Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   Writer
hey thank you
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Missdelayingit Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure
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Helen0fTroy Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
Simple, but really deep. I love the first line. Nice work.
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threedayweekend Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   Writer
merci, helenoftroy
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The vision is gorgeous. Great wording and the imagery is very fine.
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threedayweekend Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012   Writer
Thanks. omg I never noted you back!!!


I'm sorry I forgot. I am forgetful!
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries. I don't sweat the small stuff. =D
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